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You tell me that hearts don't work, that the sounds they make are just ghosts passing through. That bodies are pieces of everything everyone's lost slowly coming apart. Burning down childhood homes is a hobby of yours, and it's your plan to die that way, dancing with the flames. But oh, warrior of summers spent kissing too many girls with sharp teeth, put your lighter down. The night is a snow globe, and we are two figurines posed together as stars swirl around us. You can always burn yourself tomorrow. Be with me tonight, instead. Let the broken parts of me fit into the broken parts of you; I could be the piece you need to get your chest to start.
incomplete wholeness.
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fragments. by ~ohellohara is intensely poignant. ( Suggested by foraoises and Featured by neurotype )
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Echolalic-Ellie Feb 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Lovely piece.
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ohellohara Apr 1, 2014   General Artist
Thank you!!
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Echolalic-Ellie Apr 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure. :meow:
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i-am-a-bridgewalker Nov 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
oh wow. totally deserving of the dd.

I love the surprising turns between the surreal concrete images.
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ohellohara Dec 10, 2013   General Artist
Thank you! I can definitely see my current style of writing beginning to take shape in this piece. Hindsight is 20/20, or so they say.
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i-am-a-bridgewalker Dec 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
it's cool to look back and see your progression as a writer. sometimes I have to do it to remind myself that I've been doing the "well this is my last good poem, I'm fucked forever" thing for like two years, haha.
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onetwistedpoet Oct 11, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Beautiful, I love how concisely you establish the depth to save the last line from being cliché.
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ohellohara Oct 12, 2013   General Artist
Thank you so much for your comment! I'm glad to hear the ending wasn't cliché... I know I love cheesy things, but usually they don't make for the best writing, ahahah. I'm glad you enjoyed it!!
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Wonderful, I can't find the words to explain the feelings that this inspires, and congrats on the Daily Deviation. :-D
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ohellohara Oct 9, 2013   General Artist
Thanks so much, Sean! I'm really glad you liked it!! Hopefully they're good feelings, hahahah. And thanks for your congratulations, too!
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