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You tell me that hearts don't work, that the sounds they make are just ghosts passing through. That bodies are pieces of everything everyone's lost slowly coming apart. Burning down childhood homes is a hobby of yours, and it's your plan to die that way, dancing with the flames. But oh, warrior of summers spent kissing too many girls with sharp teeth, put your lighter down. The night is a snow globe, and we are two figurines posed together as stars swirl around us. You can always burn yourself tomorrow. Be with me tonight, instead. Let the broken parts of me fit into the broken parts of you; I could be the piece you need to get your chest to start.
incomplete wholeness.
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Daily Deviation

Given 2013-10-08
fragments. by ~ohellohara is intensely poignant. ( Suggested by foraoises and Featured by neurotype )
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Skittle-Mafia Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I know this is a bit late but my goodness! This is stunning! One of the best works I've seen in a long time. A story woven with so few words... my heart sung while I read this piece. You leave me breathless. I only put things that capture my attention into my faves, and within seconds of reading it , I clicked the favorites button. This is so perfect. Absolutely marvelous.
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introverted-ghost Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2014   Writer
Lovely piece.
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ohellohara Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2014   General Artist
Thank you!!
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introverted-ghost Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014   Writer
My pleasure. :meow:
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i-am-a-bridgewalker Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
oh wow. totally deserving of the dd.

I love the surprising turns between the surreal concrete images.
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ohellohara Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013   General Artist
Thank you! I can definitely see my current style of writing beginning to take shape in this piece. Hindsight is 20/20, or so they say.
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i-am-a-bridgewalker Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
it's cool to look back and see your progression as a writer. sometimes I have to do it to remind myself that I've been doing the "well this is my last good poem, I'm fucked forever" thing for like two years, haha.
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onetwistedpoet Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Beautiful, I love how concisely you establish the depth to save the last line from being cliché.
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ohellohara Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2013   General Artist
Thank you so much for your comment! I'm glad to hear the ending wasn't cliché... I know I love cheesy things, but usually they don't make for the best writing, ahahah. I'm glad you enjoyed it!!
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PineappleOverlord Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2013
Wonderful, I can't find the words to explain the feelings that this inspires, and congrats on the Daily Deviation. :-D
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ohellohara Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2013   General Artist
Thanks so much, Sean! I'm really glad you liked it!! Hopefully they're good feelings, hahahah. And thanks for your congratulations, too!
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lomatic Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
moving piece.
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ohellohara Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2013   General Artist
Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it!!
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MyDream25 Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013
Whoa! My feels... I mean, it seems impossible to tell a story through only some sentences! But you did it! It's really touching... Somehow you are able capture feelings and a story so fantastically. VERY well deserved DD! Thank you for writing this!
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ohellohara Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2013   General Artist
Thank you so much for your comment! I'm so glad you like this piece so much!! I hope your feels turned out okay, bahahah. Thank YOU for reading! <3
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Ilaezha Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Wonderful! This short piece tells a great story.
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ohellohara Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013   General Artist
Thank you! So happy you liked it!!
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TwilightArtisan Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Well said...
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ohellohara Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013   General Artist
Glad you think so!
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TwilightArtisan Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It's cool, I like it :)
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Zaqhirix Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow. That's just...wow.
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ohellohara Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013   General Artist
Hopefully that's a good thing, hahahah. PS, your icon is too cute!!
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Zaqhirix Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
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ohellohara Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013   General Artist
Thank you so much! I really appreciate it!!
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Shonjikari Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013  Student General Artist
Ooh my god congrats!! <33 I won't spam your comment section since you know all my feelings but I'M SO PROUD OF YOU AND HAPPY YOU TOTALLY DESERVE THIS MAN. 
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ohellohara Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013   General Artist
Aaaaaaah, thanks so much dude! I'd better see you post more of your work now, man!! Bahahahah <333
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Lunaveon Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013
Wow, this is simply...amazing. It has a...'raw' like quality to it, and it creates quite a bit of imagery, even though it's short. I love it.
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ohellohara Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013   General Artist
Thank you so much for your comment! I'm so glad you feel that way! I'm happy you enjoyed it so much!! A lot of my earlier work is like that: very short and very packed with imagery. For now I've broken away from the prosey/drabble sort of writing and have been on this poetry kick that has lasted for a couple of years, but this DD (and more important, everyone's wonderful comments, including yours) has got me thinking that maybe picking up an old habit wouldn't be such a bad thing.... But I digress. Thanks again!
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Lunaveon Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013
I must say, your wonderful at doing this (and your other things, I've scanned them now) and..just wow. Again. Your truly gifted.
^^; And yes, I forgot to congratulate you, so congratulations on the DD! You truly deserve it!
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ohellohara Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013   General Artist
Ahh, thanks so much! I'm so glad you think so! And thanks for the congrats, too!! I also very much appreciate you taking a look through my other work <3
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sarcastic-Assassin Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013   Photographer
Very good piece, well deserving of a DD!
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ohellohara Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013   General Artist
Thank you!! I'm so glad you think so!!
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BeareMa Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
So deep; so much emotion put into such a topic. I feel as if it fits to the way I feel about a girl I know. Nicely done my friend, nicely done.
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ohellohara Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013   General Artist
I'm glad this piece hit you on that level. Thanks for letting me know, I really appreciate it. So happy you liked it!!
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BeareMa Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I just got through with a relationship...
I wrote a poem about it...
It's called Her Eyes
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ohellohara Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013   General Artist
Ooh, ouch, I'm sorry to hear that. I find that writing helps. Hopefully it did for you, just getting those feelings out onto paper (or computer screen, hahahah) and making them tangible.
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BeareMa Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer

I'm thinking about putting some of my other poems from several years ago on deviantart, maybe they'll have the same effect on people yours has had on me...

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Queen-of-Butterflies Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
this is good :)
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ohellohara Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013   General Artist
Thank you, I'm glad you think so!!
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Queen-of-Butterflies Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
welcome! :)
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nynylynn Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
I'm so proud of my sis getting a DD! :love:
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ohellohara Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013   General Artist
Thank you so much, Nyny! <3 I'm so proud of you for being you!!!
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howardmac Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013  Student Artist
Wow bro .... that was really good ..... i wish i can write that good
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ohellohara Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013   General Artist
Thanks, I'm glad you liked it! I'm glad you think I'm a good writer, but you can write even better than I do if you really want to. Writing, just like anything else, takes practice, dedication, and a lot of following in other people footsteps. I mimicked many other writers' styles before I found a few ways of writing that I really enjoy working with, and even those come and go with time. I believe in you, I'm sure you can do it! Before you're good at something, you have to struggle at something, and before you struggle at something, you have to try it.
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howardmac Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2013  Student Artist

Your right bro. If I try harder I can be as good as you. I need to work on my spelling and gramer. Then pratice and pratice and pratice tell I become as good or better then you. This website will help me express my feellings.

Your so right bro  ... thanks for posting back.

Oh and The name of the book really got me to look at it.

"Fragments" .... I love that as a name.

 :D

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ohellohara Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2013   General Artist
No problem! There's no limit to how good at anything you can be. Think of anyone you idolize who has a craft, writing or music or acting, or anything! They didn't start out that good, they had to work hard and dedicate a lot of time, oftentimes their lives, to getting to that point... but so many of us don't get to see that process that it's easy to forget that stuff like that doesn't happen overnight. Even I forget, too. The trick is to constantly focus on improving... never be completely satisfied with where you're at. You can always get better at something. PS, I'm glad you like the name too!
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howardmac Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2013  Student Artist

That so ture. Thanks for the advice man. That made my will to improve stronger.

I'm trying to make friends on this website and I dont know hot to add people. If you don't mind sending me a friend request.

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ohellohara Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013   General Artist
You're very welcome!!

When you visit someone's gallery, there should be a button in the top right that says "+Watch" Click it, and you're watching me! I'll watch you, too!!
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howardmac Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2013  Student Artist

i dont know if i did  it or not ... am i whatching u now

 

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